‘Everyone deserves a chance to walk with everyone else.’ this sentence is from the song ‘Hero’. Though, not everyone is able to ‘walk with everyone else’. If they want to actually ‘walk with every else’, they will have to pay for it. They need money to buy good clothes, expansive jewelry, and good image to everyone. Just like the story ‘The Necklace’. The main character did walked with everyone else, but it is only one short night. This one night of famous made her spend 10 years of life to pay for it.
When said, "They need money to buy good clothes, expansive jewelry, and good image to everyone". You need a 'a' before the good. Good job on the rest of this paragraph
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Daniel
9/16/2013 07:49:13 am
I really like your photo Susan. It was a good choice. On the matter of your writing it was similar to the necklace as it was very well written. Again there were a few small errors but for the most part you had very good points and went into good detail. I also think you really grasped the concept of the story well. Overall I think that you are quite a talented writer susan.
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